Hayden Ryan was lost south of San Jose, fleeing from a past not of her doing, except picking the wrong boss: a Russian scammer with connections to the criminal underworld who eliminated witnesses with ruthless efficiency. Trying to head into Santa Cruz, she ended up on a dark coastal road at Pelican Pointe, a sleepy town on the California Coast, and the handsome and rugged deputy who sensed she's running from something, but not sure what. As Hayden pondered settling down in the sleepy town, and falling for the deputy, she was fighting her instincts to be secretive and run, even as a hitman closes in...
To explain how lame the plot points were, I'll have to spoil much of the plot.
WARNING / SPOILERS AHEAD
The general idea was Hayden was fleeing from some bad guy and she found a sleepy California town and settled down, then she's conflicted about whether to settle down (for love or else) or have a bad guy that show up and possibly hurt more people in town.
1) Was Hayden offered witness protection? The answer is yes, but she REFUSED, because she refused to stay incommunicado with her mother and sister. So she basically decided that she's better than the US Marshall service in protecting witnesses, i.e. herself, despite being so naive that she had a mobster for a friend/boyfriend. Hah!
2) She must stay in touch with her mother and sister... so she bought prepaid phone, but she never throw it away like you should treat a burner phone, but instead, keep buying minutes for it, and talked to her family several times a week, at least ten minutes each time. believing these prepaid phones are untraceable! How can someone, who managed to run, apparently for several YEARS, be this stupid?
3) She apparently feared that if bad guys show up in town people will get hurt, so she was getting ready to run again. Wait, what? That made no sense when she refused witness protection in the first place, even as she was told that her amateur efforts were useless and they'll track her down. It made NO logical sense whatsoever!
4) The most unforgivable one... "People with funny accents, claiming to be her brother, was asking around..." Oh, puh-lease. That's just so stupid of an excuse for a hitman.
There are more instances of bad plotting, but these are the worst. I'm not sure I want to read another book from the same author to see if the problem was endemic.
Category: Romantic Suspense
Primary Plot: Woman on the run went got lost in a small town, was rescued by a man, but will she stay, or run
Tropes: woman in peril, protector, small town
Overall Rating: 2/5
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